Well, at least he got a honorable mention at Blizzard'c Cinematic Contest! Congratulations! 
Especially the dream at the beginning was very good. But there are some things to improve, mainly the camera. It has sometimes a very high far clipping, try to lower it, and try to move it a little more fluently. And during the battle, position it better; sometimes you don't see the main part you should see, e.g. the hero (sorry, I forgot his name) fighting. That's not good and if you cut that fast you did to give it more action, the watcher must have the main thing in the center to recognize it at the first sight. Otherways it is confusing.
And perhaps you should try to make some scenes more slowly and calm to have a contrast to the action of the battle.
Just the same issue as with most of the other contest cins: it seems there wasn't enough time to put the finishing touches to it.
Especially the dream at the beginning was very good. But there are some things to improve, mainly the camera. It has sometimes a very high far clipping, try to lower it, and try to move it a little more fluently. And during the battle, position it better; sometimes you don't see the main part you should see, e.g. the hero (sorry, I forgot his name) fighting. That's not good and if you cut that fast you did to give it more action, the watcher must have the main thing in the center to recognize it at the first sight. Otherways it is confusing.
And perhaps you should try to make some scenes more slowly and calm to have a contrast to the action of the battle.
Just the same issue as with most of the other contest cins: it seems there wasn't enough time to put the finishing touches to it.